writing process 1

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3rd Grade Language Arts Mary Ruebusch McCurdy School
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OBJECTIVE The learner will practice and review revising and editing ACTIVITY The students will read and revise a piece written by a 3rd grade student

Warning This show contains intentional errors

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PROCEDURE 1 Click to move through these slides Read the entire piece 2 Then discuss and journal questions and problems found in the story 3 The next set of slides has a revised but unedited story 4 The students may use the pen to mark corrections or you may wish them to journal

Read this unedited story by Brad a third grader
How Tanner lost his tooth They were playing soccer because they had a game And Tanner s team was winning one to nothing
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Tanner blocked a shot and kicked the ball far away from the goal Tanner looked like he had two black eyes But he said he just didn t get enough sleep Then Ryan stoled the ball and then he passed to Tanner
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Tanner wasn t paying attention and the ball hit him in the mouth Tanner lost his tooth The End Make a list of questions that you have after reading this story

Some questions you might have are

How old are Tanner and Ryan Why did the author include the part about the two black eyes What happened after Tanner lost his tooth
What are your questions

With a partner make up a story about the soccer game Use the facts that Brad gave you and make up the parts that are missing from the story

Brad has revised his story but he still needs help with editing As you read his story use the pen to mark parts that need correction
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How Tanner lost his tooth
My friends Tanner Ryan and Zach and Kyle were playing soccer on saturday morning It was a important game Tanner looked tired like he had too black eyes The rest of the team looked ready to play Continue

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Tanners team was winning one to nothing Suddenly Tanner blocked a shot and kicked the ball far away from the goal Then Ryan stoled the ball and passed it to Tanner
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Tanner wasn t paying attentiion and the ball hit him in the mouth Tanner yelled and we all ran to him When he opened his moth we saw that his tooth was missing Tanner drank some water and sat down for a wile Later he fininhed the game His team won It was a very lucky tooth

A good story has an effective beginning middle and end a clear controlling idea clearly addresses the topic and provides specific relevant details contains words that are specific accurate and suited to the topic contains few errors in grammar punctuation capitalization and spelling
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